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Script consultancy · Karel Segers

Your script,
diagnosed.

One reader, one written report, and a ranked list of fixes. Twenty years of reading professionally, and a taste including yours.

A page of screenplay marked up in red and green pen.
Page 4 — as marked

You already know something is wrong.

  • Readers say they like it; and pass anyway.
  • The second act is thirty pages of waiting.
  • You cannot say what it is about in one sentence.
  • Draft seven feels further away than draft three.

Whichever one it is, the diagnosis starts in the same place, and that part is free.

Selected credits

Films Karel consulted on.

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Karel Segers
Story analyst · The Story Department

Twenty years reading for festivals, funds and producers.

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Karel Segers
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Kōkā
2025 · Drama
Written byKath Akuhata-Brown
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The Legend of Baron To'a
2020 · Action, Comedy
Written byJohn Argall
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Danger Close: The Battle of Long Tan
2019 · War, Drama
Written byStuart Beattie, Karel Segers, James Nicholas
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The Furies
2019 · Horror, Thriller
Written byTony D'Aquino
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Bad Cat
2016 · Animation, Comedy
Written byLevent Kazak
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Wadjda
2012 · Drama
Written byHaifaa al-Mansour

“He just might be the most underrated story analyst in the world today. … my first feature film would never have been made.”

Richard Barcaricchio, Writer/Producer, Veritas Entertainment; Co-writer, Rippy (2024) · Intensive Care

“Karel has the unique ability to present complex ideas in a simple and engaging way.”

Sonia Bible, Writer/Director; The Witch of Kings Cross (2020) · Script Notes

“A fairer statement would be that I have a writing career BECAUSE of Karel.”

Erin Skye Foy, Screenwriter · Devcon 3

How it works · what you receive

Send it, and get back something you can work from.

The report opens with the priorities, ranked in the order they should be fixed. Line-level detail comes last, because most of it changes again in the next draft anyway.

Deliverable 01

Logline

One sentence that includes: protagonist, want, obstacle, cost.

Free with every service

Deliverable 02

Step outline

Your script cut down to one line per scene, so the shape is clear.

Free with every service

Deliverable 03

Structural notes

Premise, act turns, want and need; plus your priorities, ranked.

Script Notes and above

Deliverable 04

Scene notes

Scene by scene: what each one costs, earns, and could lose.

Script Notes and above

The first two are always included. Karel writes a logline and a step outline for your script whatever you book. If you send your own versions as well, you get his notes on those too, at no extra cost.

The first page of a story coverage report, cropped to the width of the sheet: the letterhead, then draft number, genre, format, setting and the next step, with the title and the writer’s name blacked out and a stamp reading “client copy, identifying details withheld”.

From a real report

The cover block — title and writer withheld

Every report opens the same way: what was read, when it was read, and the one thing to do next. On this copy the title and the writer’s name are the only details blacked out.

A panel headed “What to do first — before anything else”, instructing the writer to rewrite the synopsis before touching the script.

From a real report

Page 2 — the one job that comes before the rest

The first thing in the document is the single job that comes before everything else. Nothing further in the report matters until it is done.

Read a sample report →

Start free · before you book

Two documents, whatever service you choose.

A logline and a one-page synopsis. They are the part of the diagnosis you can do yourself, and they cost nothing. If a story will not survive one sentence and one page, the notes will only tell you that more expensively. Read the guide.

Document one

The logline

One sentence: who wants what, what stands in the way, and what it costs.

Document two

The one-page synopsis

The whole story on one page, ending included. A synopsis that hides the ending cannot be diagnosed.

Draft a logline from your outline

The generator is having a moment off. The two documents below are the part that matters anyway — write the sentence yourself, and bring it with your script.

The tool · on your own draft

A step outline of your script, in a few minutes.

Upload the screenplay and get back the structural x-ray: one step for every slugline, the acts and sequences marked, and the page each beat falls on. It is the document Karel builds first on every script he reads, because where the sequence breaks fall is what tells you the shape of the thing.

Build a step outline

  • One step per scene Every slugline in the script gets a line, numbered, with its page. Nothing is merged or skipped.
  • Breaks on the climax A sequence ends where the emotional turn lands, never on the arrangement that follows it. You get the reasoning as well as the answer, so you can argue with it.
  • Yours to keep Markdown, Word and PDF. Your script is deleted from the server afterwards; the outline stays with you.
A writing desk with a typewriter and a laptop against a white brick wall

Send your script

Send your script to Karel.

About to order, not sure which service fits, or already booked: upload the script and say which, and it goes straight to Karel.

Send your script

Where The Story Doctor stands on AI

A human reads every word.

Karel uses Anthropic's Claude to improve his service to you; not to do the work. It will fact-check, transcribe consultations, tidy the notes. The judgment is always Karel's.

The Story Doctor guarantee

Karel makes an effort to read every word of your script and assess on its own merits. No AI model will decide what is right or wrong with your story. Where AI does touch part of the service, nothing you send is seen by anyone else, and none of your work is used to train anything, ever.

What we ask in return

That the work you send is yours. Keep AI-generated material out of the draft, for the integrity of the notes and for your own protection down the line.

A section headed “What’s working — protect”, listing four things the draft gets right, with a handwritten blue note beneath the last one.

From a real report

The notes are dictated before they are typed

Section one is what the draft already gets right. The blue hand in the margin is Karel’s commentary, dictated while reading.

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